Claire looked up at the east bank of the river,dipping her head with red eyes,filling with tears,and felt as if the first step would take the little strength left in her.She sighed and stooped to put on her shoes,and picked up her basket.She started to walk through the reeds and shrubbery,watched few paces ahead for snakes.Long blades of grass whispered around her ragged skirt,slashing at her bare skins…
是这样子吗?……老实说,没太懂你的问题.是要用修辞手法?还是单纯动动结构让文章变得紧凑一些?你看看这样行不行吧……