Today is November 10 and winter is coming.The weather gets cold and it snows heavily.There are four seasons in Shanghai.They are spring,summer,autumn and winter.In spring,it is warm,while in summer,it is hot.Many people like having ice cream and soft drinks in summer.In autumn,it is cold,and we can see many fallen leaves.In winter,it is freezing,but we can make snowman in the yard.
The weather is changeable in Shanghai.
没有什么大错误.我稍稍改了下第一、二句的动词,另外加了些连词,这样比较通顺自然.