你好这位朋友,我觉得你翻译得已经不错啦,特别是第一句开头的用词,蛮到位的嗯!
改错和修改成地道英文之后如下：
It poses a serious threat on human health after long-term work and study in an environment adversely affected by light pollution. Among all the negative effects associated with light pollution, its potential harm to human eyes and vision is of particular concern.
绝对语法正确+地道英文,有不懂的你就说哈,我给你解释~
记得要采纳满意答案哦 :-)