1.I must to give voice to my love-------I must give a voice to my love(must后接动词原形)
2.I prepared to do it a the Queen Cafe.——地点前少介词,用in the Queen Cafe
3.I am full of confidence in my own ._--------by one's own
4.I sat in the cafe began my waiting,waited for my love arrived and considered how to express my feeling.---------建议删began my waiting,
for my love arrived改成for my love's arriving因为她
还没来.
5.Slowly in the past---建议改成time flied slowly
6.My heart beanten fast as fast as machine gun shoot.----建议换种表达,这种比喻不太温馨,My heart beanten faster and faster.
7.liked a pure angel.---like此为介词,不是动词,直接用