鉴于1L已经写了,我就不写了,帮你把一楼的文再改改：
I was deeply moved(我觉得这里用感动比激动更好） when I was reading 'Three Days to See'（首字母要大写,还要加单引号）.
Helen Adams Keller,the author of this book(至少说一下她是作者吧,要不然突然蹦出来一个人没有交代,逻辑上不连贯）,had unlucky experience when she was a baby.When she was only 19 months old,she got seriously ill which made her blind and deaf since then on.Although she suffered a lot,she never give up and built up a very strong will.She believed in herself and was very successful when she grew up.
I admired Helen so much when reading this book.I decided to study hard and make good grades in the future,to make my parents being proud of me.(I will treasure(珍惜）my health and take exercise everyday.建议这句整句删掉,因为说实话,这本书最主要是讲人内心的坚强和意志力的,突然扯到健康.有点别扭）
一楼的语法,逻辑,用词还是问题挺多的,我不敢保证我的就是完美,但是至少会比一楼的读起来通顺很多.希望对你有用.