1.将the去掉,take place指“发生”.
2.very改为so,so...that指“那么...以至于”.
3.去掉a,on fire指着火.
4.for改为of,a trip of...指“到...的旅行”.
5.after改为before.
6.that改为which,在非限制性定语从句中先行词不能用that,应该用which.
7.将from去掉,look out of指“从...向外看”.
8.将was改为were.
9.将lies改为lying,做后置定语.
10.将hardly改为hard,hardly意为“几乎不”.