嗯,那个.在英语里,讲述故事时,要用一般过去时,楼主好像得把全篇都改了
A spring afternoon,he comes to the park regularly and comes across
这句A spring afternoon前面要用介词
The spring sunshine,the blue and clear sky,the quite lake and the beautiful girl standing under the cherry tree.
仔细分析下,这句的主语是什么,有系动词吗
和后句一起改成under the cherry tree standed the beautiful girl with the spring sunshine,the blue and clear skyand the quite lake ,the prospect of which seemed as a beautiful picture
还有在写英文时,有些单词汉语里的意思在英文里是不通的,就像
But he is out of the picture
out of这个短语在这个语境里是不贴切的.改成he didint belong to the picture
the cherry is going to opening改为open