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It was already 5p.m,the sun sank below the horizon.The crowd were packed like sardines in the MRT(捷运）station.Jane and her friends were preparing to go home from a camp.
When they WERE out of MRT,Jane was talking about camping happily with her friends WHEN she saw her best friend Mary was in front of her ."Bye!Everyone,I saw one of my FRIENDS,I am going home with her,see you next day !" Jane was chasing after Mary .When she ran through the escalator,there was a banana peel,she did not see it and stepped on it .Suddenly,she was tumbling and rolling down the stairs of escalator.
In front of Jane,there was a teenager who was listening TO the song leisurely and he WAS not realising what happening around him."Help me!"Jane gave a loud SHRIEK."Did you HEAR ANY screaming?" One of the Jane's FRIENDS asked others."No!It is Jane!" They immediately ran towards the sound and they were ASTOUNDED.Jane's face was INJURED and her arms were scratched.There were many passengers around her and one of kind-hearted LADIES HAD already called up ambulance."Jane!Are you ok?" Jane's friends asked in CONCERNS.
Soon,THE ambulance was arriving and Jane was SENT to hospital.It was not serious .After this lesson,Jane understood that she should not ran so quickly that she did not SEE the banana peel,we should not throw rubbish anywhere as it might hurt someone